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plugz's picture

Much, much better

Well done.

pokie's picture

Ditto to the above. But, I

Ditto to the above. But, I think the rotary logo thing just seems odd in the placement w/ mouse.. font choice... etc? Maybe it's just me.

nanda's picture

hai

that'z acctually orginal logo so we cant touch right!

pokie's picture

Yes, I realize that. I'm

Yes, I realize that. I'm saying, try it in different locations, different sizes, try different fonts for the body type that may complement eachother better, etc... try to make some balance.

mara06's picture

I agree. It's a much better

I agree. It's a much better layout. I've seen something very much like it somewhere before, though. Perhaps our resident "layout librarian," Notobasso, can come up with the connection my subconscious is trying to make.

The Rotary Club logo is lifted from the Web site. I think its placement is okay. Were you thinking it should become mouse skin? Hmmm...

it's a relief to know that nanda has more than one font on his computer.

I would like to see him tackle something completely original.

Mara

nanda's picture

hai

thank u mara..

natobasso's picture

Ads with mice go WAY back.

Thanks Mara! Didn't know you saw me that way. :)

Ads with mice go WAY back. See this one for the Commodore 64:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/m1a9366b/396714107/

Here's a really clever one (no mouse) that has the text written in blood but tastefully done:
http://adsoftheworld.com/media/print/national_blood_centre_red_ink

And another mouse ad for car parts:
http://adsoftheworld.com/files/mouse_1.jpg

I have an original rotary logo (might be jpg) that I could send to you if you need it...

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Client: "can you guys make it more like a power-point presentation, you know, with the sliding text stuff and all?" (http://clientcopia.com/quotes.php?id=7)

mara06's picture

Sorry to make you blush,

Sorry to make you blush, dahling. Also sorry I misspelled your name! Those are interesting samples.

Mara

natobasso's picture

No sorry necessary. :) All

No sorry necessary. :) All in good fun. And don't worry about my name, it's just a screen name.

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Client: "can you guys make it more like a power-point presentation, you know, with the sliding text stuff and all?" (http://clientcopia.com/quotes.php?id=7)

stephanie's picture

Mouse angle

The mouse has a much better angle this time, anyone can tell that that was a mouse, now. The print is too small for me to read at it's current size, but I imagine at the full size you'll be able to.

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nanda's picture

hai

in actually size you can read the copy as well...

Chez A's picture

Suggestions

I like your idea about the online blood bank and this version is so much better than the previous one but I got a few suggestions. For the logo, I would place it on top of the block of text that you have (on top of the line "Online blood bank launched.") then move the whole thing (texts and logo) at the bottom ... aligned with the red mouse (on the left side) so that when you read the text your eyes won't be going around looking for the next element. Also, if you could change the mouse cord color to red to sort of like represent a blood tube would be perfect. Those are just my suggestions.

mara06's picture

Ooh, Chez A -- good idea

Ooh, Chez A -- good idea about the cord. It's just the right size, too. Maybe he could make it translucent to further enhance the connection. Of course, that would freak out some people, though most likely not the target audience, for obvious reasons.

Mara

tonyvz's picture

left align the website with

left align the website with the heading. it looks out of place.

other than that, great piece!!

nanda's picture

hai

thank you for all your suggestions...

nanda's picture

cord

i have made cord on red colour it's not looking good!!!

and any way we are talking about blood bank right i don't think it's need cord to be red right...

nanda's picture

logo

and logo is shifted to above the headline.

nanda's picture

GOOD!

and now it's really looking good!

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